Before and After

March 3rd, 2011

On the left is the first version of this drawing. On the right is the second version. I rushed to finish it for LA Illustrator’s Day last November. Usually I outline things in my drawings in black, but I didn’t for this one. I thought I liked it, but after a couple days I realized that something was missing. Recently, I’ve been trying to go back to drawings that I like, but aren’t quite there and see if I can improve them.  I tend to toss them aside but I think there’s value in revisiting a drawing and looking at it with fresh eyes. Even if the final result doesn’t turn out to be better, I learn something from the process. I’m not sure which version of this I like better. Any thoughts?

3 Responses to “Before and After”

  1. Sarah Oxford says:

    I prefer the second. My impression of the first is that the image is a wall and the boys and fish are at equal depth. It’s almost like looking at a well-done graffiti wall in the city. The black outline in the second gives space. It’s easier to separate him from the aquarium, thus the boys appear like they’re looking at the fish and not standing beside the fish. I love your work! Keep it coming!

  2. Carolinejmay says:

    I think the second one has more “punch.” The first looks almost “painterly,” a style which could probably be perfected using the ipad or markers if you were looking to be that kind of artist, but I don’t think you are. The hard edges of the second drawing makes it much stronger and more graphic. I think the composition of this one is “right on.” And your figures are much better. The gestures are perfect.

  3. Rose says:

    I agree with the other comments – the outline around the boys makes an important difference. In the first I looked at the fish more than the boys.